If
you've tried to write a story and have let be evaluated, you've likely
been hit with the chestnut of advice, “Show, don't tell”. The use
of this bit of advice can become so extreme that you might need to
fight back the temptation to tell the people saying this to you that,
if they really want to be shown the story, they should put down the
book and go watch the movie.
Now,
I've no doubt there is a time and place for this advice. There are
times when “Tom watched a scary movie” needs something more, like
“Tom sat on the couch, his eyes wide and fixed on the television,
as the movie monster stalked its next victim through the dark,
fog-filled forest.”
But
I also think this advice can be given wrongly, too.
One
way is by insisting on needless physical descriptions when something plain
and basic could work just as well. For example, take the phrase “She
felt nervous”. Maybe not a great sentence, but functional, and even
appropriate in some situations. But “show, don't tell” people
would insist on being shown her nervousness, by having writers tell
about sweating palms, twitching eyes, stammering speech, or any of
the other many manifestations of nervousness a person might have.
And
there will be times when such descriptions are good, too, when they
actually do add something to the story. Maybe when she is nervous,
she starts lisping, and that lisp plays a part in the story. Or maybe
her eyes do start twitching, and that affects her vision when she
gets nervous, and that's important to the story.
But
to just go into such physical descriptions, without any good reason
relevant to the story, simply doesn't seem smart. Why insist on
mentioning sweating palms or some other nervous twitches when they
are not important? If saying “She felt nervous” will tell us all
we need to know, then it seems like that should be enough.
Another
way gets back to the bit of sarcasm in the first paragraph, the one
about those who want to be shown a story should watch the movie. That
was facetious, yes, but it does point to the idea that it seems like
“show, don't tell” insists that all the elements and events in
the story should involve only how character's act or say, with some
room for scene descriptions thrown in.
But
that's not how good story writing works. Reading a story is not the
same as watching one, either on TV or in a movie. Each has it's own
strengths and weaknesses, and one of the big strengths of writing is
that it allows the reader to get into the heads of the characters, to
see their thoughts and motivations.
Again,
let's take “She was nervous”. While going into physical
descriptions might be helpful, there may be other information that
would be good to know, too, that can't be conveyed by physical
actions alone. “She stood five feet from the cliff's edge, too nervous to
walk any closer, feeling dizzy even this close to the long fall”.
“She knew it was silly and childish, but she still felt nervous
when she saw him him walking over to her table, hoping he would
remember it was her birthday”. We start to understand her a little
better this way.
A
few months ago, I got the CD discs for the series Building Great Sentences by Brooks Landon, from Great Courses, and I think
listening to that series has helped me understand better what might
really be behind “show, don't tell”. It's the idea that we should
be more descriptive in our writing, going into greater details,
skillfully adding necessary information to our stories and writing.
Landon would likely put it differently then I have here, and goes
more into methods and mechanics and I would greatly recommend his
lectures as being very helpful. While I'm not so sure that longer
sentences are always is needed, especially some of the rambling ones
Landon mentions at times, it does seem like that notion of making
longer sentences to give the reader more information is pointing in
the right direction.
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